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A Moving Curtain

A loud moving curtain pounding the ground suddenly came with a noisy friend. All I could do was smile. This was welcoming the holiday (our spring holiday- brought forward). A fresh breeze is always welcome as it has been sweltering. 

The monster was here. It came with it’s own rhythm, slapping the different surfaces. I stood out there to watch the curtain flow, inside me I thought, this is going to be good.

Everyone needs you. We do, the plants do and I wonder how the pets feel. Our dogs must despise the heat too, they curl cozily in front of the door watching the curtain unwind. The darkened noon, creates a pleasant feeling, and makes staying indoors extremely enticing.

Unexpectedly a gruelling, vibrating and intense sound takes over and hits us. ‘This is rare,’  I  share, my heart beating heavily. Where was that from? Does it mean there will be more rain? Probably, as the monster showed his face, clearly.

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8 responses to “A Moving Curtain”

  1. Your metaphor and personification capture the moment well. So many multiple meanings to absorb. Take care.

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  2. Interesting to consider the juxtaposition of needing the monster. Your slice has given me pause today…thank you.

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  3. I loved this line, “The darkened noon, creates a pleasant feeling, and makes staying indoors extremely enticing.” Yes, it is soothing to have a big rain breaking the heat. Thank you for the beautiful imagery.

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  4. Your word choice captivated me. I was drawn in. I had to find out who is the monster. You display talent with the use of personification and metaphors in your slice. I enjoyed the piece and a little eager for more.

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  5. You have a great mix here of description and metaphor, with just enough symbolism and ambiguity to allow us to read all kinds of different messages. Well done!

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  6. I am left speechless, but I must comment. I love this line – “The monster was here. It came with it’s own rhythm, slapping the different surfaces. I stood out there to watch the curtain flow, inside me I thought, this is going to be good.” Your descriptive language moved me (as the reader). THANK YOU for sharing this post.

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  7. Oh, so lovely! So many little surprises in your language choice!

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  8. Oooooh, Juliette, this is a monster Slice. Well done, and hope the monster brought you the cool breeze often. 🙂

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I am am Elementary school teacher at an International IB School in Accra, Ghana, West Africa. I write with groups of writers, such as Teach Write.

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